| 2005-04-10 03:04:26 |
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boring poor story written from both sides ar once |
| 2005-04-11 08:05:44 |
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hmm a bit boring could do with 3rd person view but the 1st person is alright. next time make a better story... 5/10 look at my comments on good stories. |
| 2005-04-11 15:34:56 |
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Your use of pronouns was horrible and very confusing. There is a reason you learn verb tense and pronoun continuation in school. You should have paid attention. |
| 2005-06-21 21:37:16 |
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Very pleasing story. It made me want to hang a post-it note on my door. |
| 2005-08-09 09:48:06 |
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it was written by me.....written by a friend of mine and she asked me to post it up for her..... |