| 2005-04-19 18:26:55 |
My friend Sam's adventure
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needs to be longer, but otherwise well written. good grammar ans spelling, excellent paragraph structure. i hope theres a part 2 |
| 2005-04-21 06:42:45 |
My friend Sam's adventure
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the story is knowing temself about their sex is true. in this way all of us know ourself. thanks for the story. |
| 2005-08-15 23:08:04 |
My friend Sam's adventure
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why is it that so many people seem to read these things, and focus on only the grammer, spelling, and punc.? |
| 2005-09-16 14:04:23 |
My friend Sam's adventure
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omg i waz mastubrating 2 dis story and i cummed all ova ma chair hehe!! |
| 2005-10-14 05:19:51 |
My friend Sam's adventure
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Nave, it's because it is the easiest thing to do right in a story, and it is terribly important for the readability, and many authors don't even bother trying. The mechanics of this are good, but the style needs some work. The sex is a bit abrupt and the reason for the experimentation seems peculiar, but the actual description of the sex is pretty good. |