| 2006-01-01 08:45:46 |
Dear Diary_(3)
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That's funny! Well, put some sex in it... |
| 2006-01-27 16:57:25 |
Dear Diary_(3)
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i ttly agree with you. that sucked |
| 2006-04-22 11:37:17 |
Dear Diary_(3)
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Really short and no sex at all. I would not call two times eating pussy to be a good story. Supposed to be some fucking, some eating something more than just eating twice. What you got is good for the beginning of a story. |
| 2006-06-08 03:42:23 |
Dear Diary_(3)
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Ok, you definately need to extend on her little "fantasy," and then maybe not let the mother cuss so much, because it makes it ridiculous to read every other word as a cuss word. Then, extend on the party. Go into extravagent detail. Make the boyfriend push her on the table or something. Make it public. Lots of people watching. Add some group sex and la dee da. Let the imagination flow. Then end with her going home to her mom drunk or whatever and she gets raped by her mom's boyfriend or something! Who knows! |
| 2006-07-19 10:35:53 |
Dear Diary_(3)
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details, try using "later on..." or whatever instead of the choppy lines |