| 2005-06-14 07:00:02 |
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great story....dont listen to the idiots about the rape scene, they are obviously too stupid to have noticed it was a fantasy scene where the girl was acting: "That's not my name, you little bitch!" I yelled. "I see you walking around with your short skirts and your tight shirts...you little fucking tease...I am going to teach you a lesson," I hissed. Mandy began to understand the role-play.
"Oh god don't hurt me," she pleaded. ***note mandy understood the role-play*** anyway great story, nice detail, keep writing 9/10 |
| 2005-06-14 10:57:50 |
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AWESOME!!!! write more.... this is a hot story. |
| 2005-06-14 11:04:33 |
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an all in one story. it literally had everything to get you excited. keep on writing, i will be dreaming of mandy. |
| 2005-06-14 14:18:39 |
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This story is awsome!!!! you showl keep writing man! make a second story where you involve Sandy and Kimberly more, that would be really good!!!!
10/10 :D really rocks! |
| 2005-06-14 17:23:38 |
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no need for the rape scene. the story was good for the most part, but a little long and the same descriptions were used over and over. it was almost like reading the same scene again and again. why didn't the girl in the store join in? she was obviously up for it.....and legal!! i agree with most others....why 12.....make her 16 and she's legal in the uk. 15 and at least she'd have tits and hair!! |