| 2005-08-16 15:13:05 |
Never too young
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good build up, but not enough at the end 4/10 |
| 2005-08-24 03:36:52 |
Never too young
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Sorry ya didnt enjoy it too much ill try harder on #2 (if i can remember my password) :P |
| 2005-08-29 15:34:05 |
Never too young
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you need more sexual details, its the MOST IMPORTANT PART! Also, work on ur spelling a bit, mmmK? |
| 2005-12-04 17:24:56 |
Never too young
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hey dude you did rush it a bit at the end but everyone has said that already. go into detail abou the feeling and the action. but hey i have met a 13 yo with 26c tits so dont worry about that either |
| 2007-02-15 15:39:55 |
Never too young
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The sex scene needs a ton of work. A better physical discription of the slut woul dhelp as well. More conversation while the fuck scene is occuring. Good luck |