| 2005-10-28 04:11:12 |
My visit to the United Kingdom
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I liked it, it was erotic and right to the point. You conveyed the emotions without having to give back story.... very good 8/10 |
| 2005-11-05 20:11:10 |
My visit to the United Kingdom
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it was good bases but needed more.. I like a good romance but mre intercourse would have been better |
| 2005-12-03 22:49:19 |
My visit to the United Kingdom
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the story is ok u really need to add paragraphs to it |
| 2006-01-27 13:36:08 |
My visit to the United Kingdom
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Hey man it's fuck, U know fuck means fuck not like romance, So hard u fuck so better u get ;-) |
| 2006-07-23 18:05:25 |
My visit to the United Kingdom
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Paragraphs are necessary. For the story, if it happened that way (since it is a diary), well, then it happened this way. No need for other people to ask for more or less intercourse.. I liked it apart from paragraphs which make it so much nicer to read.. |