| 2005-10-18 23:22:42 |
Slutty Slut
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um....you do realise that cucumbers have thorns when you 1st pick them right? |
| 2005-10-19 02:26:20 |
Slutty Slut
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The basic story wasn't bad, Rusty Rusty, although it might have been better to broke it down into several chapters....keep from giving sensory overload. The action was better as it went along. Don't let anyone discourage you from writing, it's the story that matters, not the spelling or grammar. And for all you other commenters...how about we stick to constructive criticism or else none at all? The point here is to encourage people to write, not deride their efforts or make personal attacks just because you don't like the subject matter or the spelling or grammar. If we treat each other like crap, soon no one will want to submit stories. |
| 2005-10-19 03:16:33 |
Slutty Slut
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Hey, Adolf!! The original fellow by that name was a pedophile and a socio/psychopath with genocidal tendecies. He was nothing to be proud of. Rusty Rusty doesn't have to worry about spelling or punctuation because the well-read mind fills in the blanks. Great story, man! I jizzed all over my hand. it's true, Rusty. Just be unoffendable. |
| 2005-10-20 05:26:26 |
Slutty Slut
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I enjoyed the story. In fact, I'll give it an 8/10, but why would anybody applaud bad spelling and sentence structure. Such complants might help future efforts. Don't be proud of being stupid. It's nothing to be proud of. learn how to write properly. |
| 2005-10-20 20:19:52 |
Slutty Slut
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I don't think any of us have the right to call anyone stupid...How do you know that for sure......I do, and believe he has more talent in his little finger than most do in their whole body. Also, a hot fuck!!! |