| 2004-03-30 19:57:54 |
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ok i didnt llkke the 'future' part that much, but i came hard! |
| 2004-04-04 15:09:06 |
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You need to learn about grammar, balance, pacing and spelling. I got a head ache reading this shit. |
| 2004-05-16 16:02:13 |
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learn to fucking spell |
| 2004-05-17 12:09:54 |
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Its a very interesting story and with the proper gramer it would be a lot more enjoyable. My raring 3/10 |
| 2004-06-15 23:19:39 |
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i agree with these guyz, confusing, terrible grammer and spelling, and all Jack said...it would have been a much better story if you would have thought about what you were writing...plus there is very little description...lame at best...i dont know how 12 coulda came to this story but w/e...its his waste of sperm...maybe if he had a girl he wouldnt waste it on lame stories?...i read them but i dont waste my load like this guy...lol i gotta girl around so if i get in that mood im gettin some :-P |