| 2005-12-11 21:25:47 |
My Daughter's Friend_(1)
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yure a man after my own hart |
| 2005-12-12 09:16:11 |
My Daughter's Friend_(1)
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Decent idea, but grammar and sentence structure work would greatly improve the story. in my opinion, everything ended too abruptly and the story was left hanging; some words seemed to be left out or were substituted by incorrect words. those are all easy problems to solve, there is potential here 1/10 |
| 2005-12-12 16:04:20 |
My Daughter's Friend_(1)
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Exellent! Bring on number2 |
| 2005-12-12 18:02:23 |
My Daughter's Friend_(1)
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Well i don't know why you put that it was a "true story" it sounded to FAKE to believe ... but nice try |
| 2005-12-12 19:39:58 |
My Daughter's Friend_(1)
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I love Sarah. She can learn a lot from a man. She'll probably teach her brother who will start fucking the daughter too. |