| 2007-12-24 10:22:46 |
My First Time With a Guy_(1)
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i luved it......made me cum all ova myself....im still a twink wanting sum up the ass......maybe ill get lucky |
| 2005-12-13 14:00:08 |
A Whole Week at Aunt Chrissie's
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hey this was not all that bad because i'm been just dying for an Aunty story' but it needed some voyuerism'like Tom's mom walking in while Aunty is jerking Tom off'' why you did'nt even haveAunt Chrissy and Tom even mention Tom's mom'Chrissy's sister 'i don't know' at least you should have had her tell Tom not to tell his mom about her jacking him off |
| 2005-12-13 15:31:05 |
A Whole Week at Aunt Chrissie's
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Great story... keep them cummmming. Should have gave us more day by day descriptions of all the action. I love to eat my aunt. |
| 2005-12-13 16:05:33 |
A Whole Week at Aunt Chrissie's
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Decent idea, but grammar and sentence structure work would greatly improve the story. in my opinion, everything ended too abruptly and the story was left hanging; some words seemed to be left out or were substituted by incorrect words. those are all easy problems to solve, there is potential here 3/10 |
| 2005-12-13 16:19:11 |
A Whole Week at Aunt Chrissie's
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Great thought. Had a little problem following the story because of the grammar and spelling. He is going to start bangin his sister and keep banging Chrissy, is he not? |