| 2007-06-13 09:59:07 |
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bello |
| 2007-07-03 17:30:47 |
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wish i had been there, love your stories, there are so many here to jackoff to. |
| 2007-07-30 16:52:23 |
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This was a little lame to be honest with you. You really need to learn a little more about the writing process. A good story takes a little more time to develop. You could have done so much more with this story. Keep working on your stories. |
| 2007-09-19 01:14:18 |
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A good start honey, the next one try and be more discriptive |
| 2007-09-29 20:01:34 |
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Not much Detail and too Vague. Go a little more indepth next time around. |