| 2005-04-24 21:38:59 |
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I can only say a few things. I think that it is sick that you people would cut down what this author wrote. He/She has done an excellent job of explaining the feeling of hope and belief in times of utter despair. I, for one, saw this excellent story for what it really was: the novel of a young lady growing up and learning to stick up for herself despite the odds. I really believe you should take your incredible writing skills elsewhere. I'm sure you could land a story in a magazine or short story collection. You should submit one, although maybe not on this subject. Keep it up! |
| 2005-05-04 21:21:11 |
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i felt sorry for her and all, but i couldn't help but seriously get turned on when she came for the first time from him fucking her (that was hot). also liked the way she ended up willingly fucking him back during the times they were alone all day while timmy was at school. not just that she did it, but the way you put it. it was in a dark and twisted way. unlike the other stories of rape where the girl all of a sudden ends up getting turned on right away screaming for her rapist to fuck her harder. shit man, that was sweet. totally didn't see that coming. very nice touch. |
| 2005-05-04 22:14:57 |
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well, that's too bad what that poor girl had to go through with her father doing all those nasty things to her.... but the good news is, i saved money on my car insurance with gieco!!!!!! {=0) |
| 2005-05-18 01:57:31 |
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I did masturbate to this story. By the tiem I was finished I felt like going to a catholic confessional... but hey, we're all a little naughty some times. You have got some cruel and disturbing thoughts. For what it's worth, I agree with the above comment about switching to third person (WTF?). I also think that there were some very redundant detail in the sex sections (especially the first flat-out rape section). If you are willing to take a little time to filet the story, then you will be sitting on a semi-legitimite piece of literature. use of "spunk" and "pussy" in the narrative is stupid as hell. It starts to sound like sheesy penthouse letters... but conceptually. Yeah, this actually has some sickening substance. Well done. |
| 2005-06-04 00:19:31 |
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Awesome story. really turned me on when the girl started to actually fuck him back and when she came. I didn't really like it when you switched to third person. Other then that 10/10 |