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| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2006-03-19 11:19:25 | Chrissy, my one true friend | What do you readers mean by asking "What happened to the fish?" I want to know what happened to the bull--With all this bullshit, there has to be a bull somewhere. Can't believe you're giving it an average over 8... I give it a 2/10. |
| 2006-03-20 07:51:32 | Chrissy, my one true friend | i say screw your idea of consistentcy, an english professor would trash that sentence. Trimble, an university of texas english professor, would say to use simple sentences. your purpose is to inform the reader, not confuse them and lose interest. please explain a couple parts he never had to meet her again? what did she not leave? he opened a window and then wished there was a window? and then she looked out the window? We didn’t bother taking out clothes off and putting swimsuits off, huh? the whole sailboats in the middle of the lake cause of sudden depth change is improbable its 25" not '25 |
| 2006-03-20 20:51:56 | Chrissy, my one true friend | I say screw your idea of consistentcy, an english professor would trash that sentence. trimble, an university of texas english professor, would say to use simple sentences. your purpose is to inform the reader, not confuse them and lose interest. > If the university professor was any good at all, he would tell you it didn't matter because its a sentence that appeals to different people in different ways. As you said, "Screw my idea of consistency." I'm glad you feel that way about that particular sentence, therefore letting it influence the rest of your reading it. You must be quite hard to please if one sentence bothers you this much. I've never lost the reader's attention with one sentence, and besides you, I seriously doubt it has any other person here. please explain a couple parts he never had to meet her again? what did she not leave? > This is where I know you're just playing dumb with me. If I had just said "That was the night my father met my mother." Would you actually think, "Oh that probably meant one of the times they saw each other." Obviously through context you can see that it meant it was the first time they met before, and the little addition after that shouldn't make a difference since its been used in other works besides this. he opened a window and then wished there was a window? and then she looked out the window? I admit it, a mistake, happy? Small continuity error that I forgot to fix up. Halfway through writing the story I decided that it would be more realistic for there to be a window. I skipped over that while writing, sorry. :( we didn’t bother taking out clothes off and putting swimsuits off, huh? That mistake is definitly worth complaining. the 'out' is supposed to be 'our' and the second 'off' is supposed to be an 'on'. thx the whole sailboats in the middle of the lake cause of sudden depth change is improbable Not necessarily since the middle of the lake is rarely the deepest part. Usually its off-center. In this case, there were probably unseen boulders underwater. Boulders in lake can be immense measuring up to 25' in diameter. So if it wasn't a very deep lake, then it's entirely possible. Sand bars can also be found in the middle of some lakes, especially when near islands, which the lake could've had. its 25" not '25 k. thx |
| 2006-03-21 00:33:32 | Chrissy, my one true friend | other than the errors it was a bad ass story dont listen to the dumb asses next story plz i give it a 9 |
| 2006-03-21 16:33:12 | Chrissy, my one true friend | wait, was she a virgin....... when did she have sex, explain! |