| 2008-01-09 04:12:02 |
little jessica
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I have to believe everyone when they say you've stolen this story. If that's the case you very obviously didn't tell it right. You most likely took a lot of out of it and probably changed a bunch of things too because the story doesn't have a natural order of things and you wrote some things that are extremely unbelievable (i..e. I fucked her for 100 hours straight! I whispered into the teacher's ear "I'm just going to fuck her and bring her back!") I would hope that you stole this story because if you made it up you didn't put a whole lot of thought into it. Suggestions for the future, write yourself an outline for your story before you even think about writing down one word. Give yourself a sense of believability and lastly, edit edit edit! Read and reread every paragraph. |
| 2008-01-09 19:23:39 |
little jessica
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is the commenter isawred seriously going to attempt a review of what is obviously purposely ridiculous writing? hahahahahahahahahaha what a pompous blowhard loosen the fuck up and laugh, dumbfuck! more stories pussyslapper!!! |
| 2008-01-12 16:45:08 |
little jessica
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Omg, this shit was so stupid but I laughed my ass off. |
| 2008-01-14 02:21:15 |
little jessica
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Pathetic, useless lazy writing by a pathetic useless lazy writer. |
| 2008-01-16 15:15:13 |
little jessica
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this so so much shit. are you dense |