| 2007-04-01 23:40:36 |
Cruel intentions Pt 1
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i fucked my sister after reading this 10/10 |
| 2007-04-12 09:19:59 |
Cruel intentions Pt 1
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too hard to read use punctuation for god's sake. |
| 2007-06-27 15:04:47 |
Cruel intentions Pt 1
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It's a good story, you just need to work on paragraph structure (A new person speaking means a new paragraph). |
| 2007-08-28 21:20:25 |
Cruel intentions Pt 1
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good story, pt 2 was also great work on pt 3 plz 10/10 |
| 2007-11-20 20:25:37 |
Cruel intentions Pt 1
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good story u add great details but dont ramble, i liked it |