| 2006-08-03 07:35:59 |
Nicole and I
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awesome |
| 2006-08-06 00:36:44 |
Nicole and I
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Great action and vivid description,but terrible spelling and grammar. The spelling detracted from the telling of the story which otherwise would have been utterly fantastic. A fine turnon. |
| 2006-08-07 03:38:42 |
Nicole and I
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i agree it did sound like u took it from a porn movie anyway great sory 10 outa 10 like other people aid bad grammer and speling but i suck at it too so i cant realy combplaine any i liked how u described it at some parts it was a lil dry like me i dont give a fuck about what the guy char looks like... anyway what kind of 17 yr old lives with his mom lol PENISPENISPENISPENISPENISPE... |
| 2006-08-08 07:30:34 |
Nicole and I
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all right |
| 2006-08-10 07:43:10 |
Nicole and I
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Bad spelling and bad grammar mean bad writing 4/10 --- hot ideas, story line 8/10 --- it got 6/10 overall |