| 2006-07-12 11:15:49 |
Reading In Between the Ranks
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Day 2, 3, 4, 5? You have my intrest. |
| 2006-07-15 10:21:01 |
Reading In Between the Ranks
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there are a few points in the story where you could have gotten a little more into detail |
| 2006-08-28 03:04:19 |
Reading In Between the Ranks
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Well done for a first story and lots of potential. You should work on dialog and pacing in future stories, but this was still excellent reading. |
| 2006-11-24 09:17:42 |
Jerry and Bobby
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10 youve got to be kidding 5 |
| 2006-11-24 09:56:47 |
Jerry and Bobby
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God i love gay guys there just so hot im a chick but i love reading gay crap and looking at gay stuff to deos that mean ima gay girl? can it be possible to be gay if your a girl i dunno but great story man got the heart beating |