| 2008-01-28 03:39:59 |
Never Shame the Family - Final Chapter
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u could have done better |
| 2008-02-01 05:22:28 |
Never Shame the Family - Final Chapter
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good storry and really enjoyed most of it but the ending should of been alot better and detailed maybe the dad could of been put in prison and you could of all lived together and had your sisters baby or something nice like that . you should of thought it through alot more at the end otherwise great work :) |
| 2006-07-22 19:51:06 |
Mels pussey by Lord Bunk
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How can you pretend to be a sex writer when you can't even spell "pussy"? |
| 2006-07-25 05:02:19 |
Mels pussey by Lord Bunk
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What a bunch of bunk, you poor soul. It's p-u-s-s-y, not pussey, dumb-ass. Learn how to spell, then find a more interesting subject matter, then come back with more. |
| 2006-07-27 12:15:35 |
Mels pussey by Lord Bunk
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good story, some spelling mistakes though, another story with more than one thing(ex eating out) is nessicary to really judge |