| 2006-07-23 06:15:39 |
My aunts dream
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It has good action, but so poorly written, with out spelling, puncuation, and paragraphs, that it is too hard to read.. Poor flow, and unbeleivable |
| 2006-07-23 06:39:27 |
My aunts dream
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it was not tht good u could have made it good for sure make it more undrstandable by punctuation and signs and ahort paragraphs |
| 2006-07-23 07:12:17 |
My aunts dream
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GOOD STORY POORLY WRITTEN AND HARD TO READ IT WAS LIKE YOUR WERE JERKING OFF WHILE YOU WERE WRITING IT |
| 2006-07-23 14:55:20 |
My aunts dream
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story was very good but need to work on spelling an langage |
| 2006-07-23 15:58:49 |
My aunts dream
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I aoplogize Im the one who wrote it. its the first time I write a story so I will fix my mistakes the next time. |