| 2006-12-12 10:47:38 |
My good friend
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Not enough detail.Take your time developing the story. |
| 2007-06-14 23:13:40 |
My good friend
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The story is good and hot, but you rushed it too much. Savor the sex. Rim each other more. Enjoy. |
| 2007-10-08 13:04:53 |
My good friend
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I got bored, honestly! |
| 2008-03-26 16:14:41 |
My good friend
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a bit too fast; go slower in the sex and dont rush it give a bit more detail on how amazing it felt and how awful it hurt (more describing words please! "good" and "bad" dont count ^_^) |
| 2006-08-28 00:16:15 |
The Web of Temptation~Long~
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This story is amazing. I liked this one even more than dark anniversary! Thanks, and keep writing! |