| 2006-08-18 13:11:34 |
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very poor structure in th story. read som of the good ones and learn. learn to spread some of the story out. better luck next time. |
| 2006-08-18 16:18:38 |
me&my cousins secret
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is this one very long sentence or do I need glasses? |
| 2006-08-18 22:12:47 |
me&my cousins secret
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you need to lay off the Starbucks |
| 2006-08-19 14:33:39 |
me&my cousins secret
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WHY ISN'T THERE ANY POINTS OR EVEN COMAS? VERY BAD STORY |
| 2006-08-20 00:47:22 |
me&my cousins secret
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i sucked i admit it its my first story and i typed it in about 20 minutes so sorry |