| 2006-08-24 19:21:09 |
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this wasn't a bad story at all, just poorly executed. use quotes to distingquish the story, from the conversation they have together. dont rush things so much either, a bit more descriptive on the outer shelling of the story, that wasn't the actual sex allows some intense build up. |
| 2006-08-25 03:12:02 |
A Soldier story
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The topic , and first lines remind me of W.E.B Griffin's book "The Lieutenants", and a chapetr therein, otherwise, well written. |
| 2006-08-25 16:44:37 |
A Soldier story
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How did you have 2 fingers INSIDE her clit? Twit! |
| 2006-08-27 19:34:18 |
A Soldier story
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50 dollars was alot in 1946 and she bought a sandwhich and a coke. also the author is 22. what a load of crap. true story should be a true story. Australia Vic |
| 2006-08-28 01:15:05 |
A Soldier story
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dude, how can you fall in love with someone with out even knowing her for at least a few weeks. Your story was complete bullshit. You fuck a girl once and them you wanna marry her? Shouldnt you learn her fucking name first? Slow down the proggression of the story man it reads like your a desparate guy whos never even fucked a girl! If you have then, you should know its physically impossible to stick 2 fingers inside someones clit! helloooooooooo dumbass |