| 2006-09-05 22:52:05 |
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not bad for a first. How does a 5'11 guy play basketball though? that's the only thing I'm wondering. keep writing. |
| 2006-09-14 22:41:42 |
a longing lust of mine for thomas
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dyke |
| 2006-11-09 12:09:33 |
a longing lust of mine for thomas
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nice, the little imperfections make it seem more real... |
| 2006-11-30 01:58:26 |
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That was actually pretty impressive. It was a window into a women's view on perfect sex, and the story was good too. |
| 2007-02-14 22:44:29 |
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I think you did fine. Especially for a first time. I might suggest you build up to the sex by doing some background. Still, its a fine little story. |