| 2006-09-18 12:54:16 |
young sister
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the person saying they're a cop can't even spell. and need too shut the fuck up. by the way bad story |
| 2006-09-18 16:12:14 |
young sister
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good effort, take no notice of wankers who couldn't write a word themselves... |
| 2006-09-18 16:34:20 |
young sister
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to the guy that says he is a cop, did you not see the "fantasy" in the desription how about the "This story is complete fiction" in the FIRST line. I didn't finish the story due to the lack of paragraphs great try need some practice though |
| 2006-09-18 16:50:36 |
young sister
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I actually loved it a little bad put it can be fixed and you can reight a better one with time |
| 2006-09-18 18:00:28 |
young sister
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PARAGRAPHS for god's sake!!! |