| 2006-09-27 10:51:55 |
Six-Mile High Club chapter 3
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My error. Please forgive me. Michael is with Miyoko, but he is having flashbacks while she sleeps. He will re-join her in chapter 5, however then she is gone from him, possibly forever. He begins a new adventure with his family in chapter 6. Although it is not an excuse, I am working on several stories simultaneously and occasionally become distracted, when I’m told to take out the garbage. Seriously, this is not a metaphor. |
| 2006-10-10 11:56:06 |
Six-Mile High Club chapter 3
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Great story, my only beef with is it that you switched to a 3rd person narrative story. Breakin one of the cardinal rules of writing, making it seem no longer like it was the same Michael. Besides that point though, good story, cant wait for the next piece (and I'm glad you're dwelving into his past). |
| 2007-01-30 08:44:47 |
Six-Mile High Club chapter 3
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great stuff! bc. |
| 2007-02-13 12:18:33 |
Six-Mile High Club chapter 3
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Flashbacks add dimensional layers to the characters personality. |
| 2006-10-12 17:26:09 |
Falling off the wagon pt4
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that's a pretty fucked up thing to do to you. I guess you weren't kidding when you said you've been through some shit |