| 2006-09-26 20:39:24 |
twin sisters together forever
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Your story was one long sentence in one long paragraph. Remember periods and capital letters as well as paragraphs next time. |
| 2006-09-27 18:25:02 |
twin sisters together forever
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lol |
| 2006-09-28 05:40:20 |
twin sisters together forever
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Jeeeezus, can you write an even longer paragraph? this piece of crap was nearly unreadable. Shame on you. Learn a little about writing style, proper paragaphing, and most of all how to write a good fuck story. |
| 2006-09-28 11:01:00 |
twin sisters together forever
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someone give me a barf bag please...did you have english classes on how to use paragraphs, punctuation and that sort? we aren't mindless morons you know |
| 2006-09-28 12:00:32 |
twin sisters together forever
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Too hard to read. Who knows if there's a story there or not? |