| 2006-09-30 16:47:10 |
My sweet police officer
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keep going...give us the rest please!! |
| 2006-09-30 17:58:15 |
My sweet police officer
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Using "u" and "r" just make the story more unnatural and unacceptable. |
| 2006-09-30 18:11:46 |
My sweet police officer
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The grammer was so bad that it ruined the whole story and it was to unbelivable even for a fiction story. And as to the second comment, it being a fiction story only means that it isn't real...if you don't want it to be belivable then you want a fantasy story. |
| 2006-09-30 22:09:56 |
My sweet police officer
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very nice....more please |
| 2006-10-01 02:31:35 |
My sweet police officer
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terrible grammar, overall ok story |