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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2006-12-07 11:22:36 | After game party | Unfrotunatly, I do not like stories about virgin men. I rated this story only at seven. :) |
| 2006-12-07 12:16:20 | After game party | if u read da 1st paragraph u will ifnd he wasnt a virgin idiot |
| 2006-12-07 14:21:48 | After game party | For all the detail here, you didn't seem to have a clear idea of your characters. In chapter 2, just after Jared gets his dick measured, there's a fun litle embrace where he and Tiffany are playing "tongue tag" while she has his dick clamped between her legs. How was this accomplished if she was 5'0" and he was 6'4"? Was she standing on a box? Aside from that, the story was fairly plesant, but the descriptions were uninspired and you kept switching from present to past tense. Good work so far, but it still needs some polish. =dreamer= |
| 2006-12-07 15:27:59 | After game party | fag |
| 2006-12-07 17:42:50 | After game party | pretty good story, i got no problems with it your a good writer, loved the random punch at the ending too haha and to the first commenter who said virgin men, well if you read the first part you find he isnt not to mention the final scene he has sex so explain that you faggot |