| 2006-12-09 00:55:16 |
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Wow you are lucky. 10/10 would give it 11/10 but I can't. |
| 2006-12-09 01:44:59 |
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Good job You do need a bit of practice, but overall well done. |
| 2006-12-09 13:56:48 |
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woow great story |
| 2006-12-09 19:20:36 |
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Nothing special, I read it all though. Listen to Deviant's advice. |
| 2006-12-09 20:37:10 |
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great story overall. really only one thing you need to work on and that is extending the fucking a little longer. it seems like jared has a little problem with premature ejaculation by the fact that he cums within the first few minutes. but i still give you a 9.5/10 for an extremely well done story. |