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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2006-11-28 20:34:12 | An Unpaid Debt Pt. 1 | Wow dude, honestly not that great. Extremely anti-climatic. You wrote way too much of an intro and not enough action. The actual act of sex is only three lines. The plot isn't bad, but I feel the ending is way too rushed. What you need to do is revise the last few paragraphs and lengthen the ending to justify the long intro. Also there are a few grammatical errors like using "of" instead of "off". So overall the story seems too hurried. Rating 5/10. |
| 2006-11-29 20:19:16 | An Unpaid Debt Pt. 1 | not bad 7/10 |
| 2006-12-02 14:09:16 | An Unpaid Debt Pt. 1 | stuck a rag in her mouth and then expects a blow job?kinda tough huh?,unless you 've come up with a different way to do it.try again though.6/10 |
| 2007-01-02 05:48:10 | An Unpaid Debt Pt. 1 | crap crap crap |
| 2007-04-03 15:02:03 | An Unpaid Debt Pt. 1 | need more backgroungd on characters. |