| 2007-09-23 00:42:38 |
A Demon's Heaven
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It's somewhat hard to find black writers on this website, so I did enjoy seeing a story that was half way worth something. There were some MAJOR problems though. It was one big ass run on sentence -- not cool. There could have been more structure. You need to get the English hookup for your readers to fully enjoy your story. It seems like you put effort into it, so I'll give you that. Thanks for posting, try to get some outside help next time or slow it down -- I believe you can do better. |
| 2008-02-01 11:10:08 |
iCarly the shopping trip
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how about Freddy's first time? |
| 2008-02-01 12:11:21 |
iCarly the shopping trip
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we need more |
| 2008-02-01 13:22:21 |
iCarly the shopping trip
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LMFAOO WERE THE FUCK IS FREDDY SPENCER IS FUCKING HAWTTTTT! |
| 2008-02-02 23:00:33 |
iCarly the shopping trip
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Sorry this part is what it is... it's only half of the second story... it was bugging me that I posted the first part and not much interesting happend.. Also I havn't been able to write more because I havn't had the time. Yet i didn't want to leave anyone hanging. So you got what I had. the rest will come within the next few days. As for Freddy? FIrst it was no Freddy... Now your all about him?? lol |