| 2007-01-03 12:14:42 |
dad/daughter roleplay 3
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Very tough to read. it doesn't have a flow because of the 'scrpt' type of writing. You've got the idea just make it easier to read. |
| 2007-01-03 13:37:35 |
dad/daughter roleplay 3
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it 2 hard to follow like that need to rewrite in to paraghes |
| 2007-01-03 19:47:27 |
dad/daughter roleplay 3
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ok everyone...the point of this story is to be written in the way its written...im not gonna change it into paragraphs, that would destroy the point of it being a REAL roleplay lol |
| 2007-02-05 04:26:54 |
dad/daughter roleplay 3
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People saying it's hard to read must not read very well. This MS had no trouble reading it. |
| 2007-02-11 04:47:39 |
dad/daughter roleplay 3
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good one - don't change your style its excitingly different |