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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2007-01-20 02:33:25 | 9 SQUEEZE BEES 10 BUNT RUNT | Your writing is improving, but here we are at part 10 and nobody got laid yet. Are you sure this story wasn't meant to go to some sports page instead of XNXX? You're gooing to have a hard time getting enough sex into the next few chapters to make up for the lack of it in the first 10. I do appreciate the thoughtfulness and tenderness in the story, though. |
| 2007-01-21 06:52:29 | 9 SQUEEZE BEES 10 BUNT RUNT | Before good sex happens, one appreciates the tenderness and intimacy. No wonder you're still reading! Keep it up. |
| 2007-01-21 12:10:33 | 9 SQUEEZE BEES 10 BUNT RUNT | ok, as a lark I have read all of your submissions thus far and I am curious. Is this serious? I have encountered other submissions that seem to be here simply to provoke responses - is this one of those? |
| 2007-01-23 04:36:33 | 9 SQUEEZE BEES 10 BUNT RUNT | Dead serious. Yes, I hope to provoke thought. Most of all, let me entertain you! |
| 2007-02-08 22:42:50 | 9 SQUEEZE BEES 10 BUNT RUNT | OK, I am going to assume that you activated the "allow comments" option because you wanted some candid feedback. First, and based on your response to the previous comment, I have to ask what kind of "thought" you believe you are provoking? Second, do you really believe this series is entertaining? I am trying to find the message you are trying to convey, but it is truly difficult. Third, you do need alot (seriously, alot) of polishing on your basic writing skills. Spelling, punctuation, changes in tense, inconsistency in structure all take away from your ideas. Have you ever read Strunk & White's "Elements of Style"? If not, you should. Last, I am going to read the rest of your posted stories now in the hopes that you have heard and acted on some of the (albiet harsh) critiques. |