| 2007-02-10 01:04:24 |
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Gotta agree with the first comment. Change the spell language to Italian or something interesting. Other than that, great. Bring in some older characters like Cho from Goblet of Fire. Make some hilarity ensue w/ the girl in the girls bathroom... Great stuff, fun to read whether horny or not. |
| 2007-02-11 00:03:25 |
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I would have used another language except for one problem, I only know English. I know that a lot of the spells in the Harry Potter stories are Latin, but since I didn't know any latin I used the one form I knew, Pig Latin. I appreciate all the comments and I will start working on a third chapter, though currently I am working on another story, soon to come out "A Ghostly Haunting". Oh and on the comment of bringing Cho, good thought but I didn't like her, so I think I will just leave her out, but I do look forward to seeing if there are anymore advise you readers would like to see in the upcoming chapter. |
| 2007-02-25 12:17:02 |
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nice, but involve harry next time! He could fuck them bove |
| 2007-03-08 07:39:17 |
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i agree short but good dont forget about the girl ron was messing with and cho you could havea whole series here esily looking forward to more |
| 2007-03-19 00:07:56 |
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GR8 STORY BUT HAVE A LITTLE INCEST WITH GINNY AND ONE OF HER BROTHERS AND FOR THE LOVE OF GOD PLEEEEESE LET HARY CATCH HERMIONE AND GINNYIN THE ACT SO HER CA USE THE CHARM AND I HOPE THE NEXT CHAPTER IS AS GOOD AS THIS ONE 10/10 |