| 2007-02-23 03:14:09 |
M.I.L.F
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Sorry, but you went from wearing nothing but swimming trunks and sandals to her reaching into your boxers etc. Do you keep clothes at her house. I somehow doubt this to be true. It was still a good story but not true. (In my opinion) |
| 2007-02-23 03:30:45 |
M.I.L.F
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It worries me that you are at uni. and you still spell "since" as "sense", otherwise not a bad story. |
| 2007-02-23 03:56:57 |
M.I.L.F
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FUCK OFF |
| 2007-02-23 05:51:41 |
M.I.L.F
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yeah the uni thing is worrying.......especially when slide is present tense, and slid is past....you should be writing slid btw, thought i might need to clarify that....agree, my opinion, not true, but still a good story |
| 2007-02-23 06:25:49 |
M.I.L.F
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Where in the fuck did you go to school? Somebody ought to beat your teacher's ass --- if you had one. It's "you're" when you mean "you are," not "your," you dope. And what's with the "sense" when it should be "since." My 5-year-old would know better. You need to go back to school and learn how to write because this could be a red-hot story. I'm the Dick Slapper and I tell it like it is. |