| 2007-02-28 05:53:19 |
My uncle's gf 2
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this was s**t, the writing was so bad that you need to go back to 1st grade |
| 2007-02-28 21:25:12 |
My uncle's gf 2
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I gave up on this pretty quick -- the story might be good, but the writing's so bad that I just couldn't get through it... |
| 2007-03-01 00:06:07 |
My uncle's gf 2
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yea its aite |
| 2007-02-28 05:13:11 |
Naruto
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Very good idea but poorly written. I like Naruto but you should be more descriptive when you write. Also, I don't meen to sound like some kind of geek but the sex and the events leading up to the sex seem a bit rushed. You should have more plot development before the actual thing, I think, because the anime series really incorporates this and this is where it shines. Nice try, 6/10 |
| 2007-02-28 06:49:13 |
Naruto
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ya, good premise but bad writing. Got kinda confused at the reading. |