| 2007-09-15 17:23:41 |
What a surprise2
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some stories are much too long - this on too short but good story |
| 2007-10-24 12:23:00 |
What a surprise2
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good story but not enough detail - don't get carried away and make it too long |
| 2007-03-14 19:57:30 |
Alice Is Pregnant 5
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SO IS SONY BOY GOGING TO GET HITCHT |
| 2007-03-16 03:40:39 |
Alice Is Pregnant 5
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Intresting story, strong characters...grammer needs some work though and they can't be fucking every time they turn around...NOt only does it get boring but it loses the realism. Lead up to the sex don't keep bombarding us with it...draw it out...make it real, not real boring. |
| 2007-03-25 17:36:40 |
Alice Is Pregnant 5
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fuck-em more. fuck-em harder. fuck megs asshole. fuck megs asshole hard. fill her pussy with baby-juice. see how young she can get pregnant. let that baby have a baby. gad, she could have 19 babies before shes 25, and another 10 after shes 25. ohh what a whoring cockslut. |