| 2007-03-25 13:41:41 |
John's Little Family Affair 4
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i don't get you raymond, you write three stories with no sex and now this? why can't you just make a consistently good series with lots of sex, but not make it so over the top like this one. i agree with the guy before me, the story suffered. 6/10 |
| 2007-03-26 00:17:44 |
John's Little Family Affair 4
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would you like to join and then post your own stories? if you can do better, i would love to see you try. thanks for the constructive critisism though. i'll use it and try and write a consistently good series... just for you. |
| 2007-03-26 16:24:27 |
John's Little Family Affair 4
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why is the story so long? it is not believeable |
| 2007-03-27 22:04:42 |
John's Little Family Affair 4
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it was good but where are the doggies????? |
| 2007-03-27 22:22:03 |
John's Little Family Affair 4
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that was good dude but i do have to say i dont like seeing the mom treated so badly i dont know if i could go thru with the rest of it if i were him i might just have to settle for the mom 9/10 |