| 2004-04-12 00:18:32 |
DADA's lil girl goes shopping
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I didnt like it bein told in first person. |
| 2004-04-12 00:25:00 |
DADA's lil girl goes shopping
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that sucked, not a big fan of first person...then again im not a big fan of sex stories |
| 2004-04-20 00:35:32 |
DADA's lil girl goes shopping
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That sucked... the story was horibly messed up ... and ya the first person crpa suked |
| 2004-04-21 01:11:09 |
DADA's lil girl goes shopping
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its not the first person point of veiw that annoys me, its the present tense timing. and a slight lack of deleivable details |
| 2004-04-24 11:49:47 |
DADA's lil girl goes shopping
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i agree the story needed alot of work before being posted. Try again. my rate 3/10 |