| 2007-11-02 08:36:51 |
Hidden Valley of Fertility
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I enjoyed the story very much! One thing irritated me, though: In chapter 4 you write how there is somehow always only one fertile human male in the valley at any one time. But you still end up having TWO fertile men in the valley! Shouldn't our main character wither and die when another man becomes fertile?? That's the "rules" of the universe you created, right? So you should stick to them! Still, very nice story, 9/10 |
| 2007-11-29 20:23:32 |
Hidden Valley of Fertility
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masterfully done |
| 2007-12-21 19:16:39 |
Hidden Valley of Fertility
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Yeah, those kids would have some fucked up genetics. A few more generations and it'll be looking like The Hills Have Eyes up in there. |
| 2007-12-29 18:28:24 |
Hidden Valley of Fertility
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Too long-winded |
| 2007-12-29 23:26:12 |
Hidden Valley of Fertility
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its like a future pedophile |