| 2007-06-21 20:28:06 |
The Island, chapter 01
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the was the worst and crap story i have ever read it wernt even gay haha |
| 2004-07-19 13:31:52 |
The Island, chapter 02
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Use caution not to create contradictions. The first part of the story showed the boy completely naked with no clothes around. Where did the clothes come from in this part? Otherwise still good. Maybe you should have combined this part with the first part to make them longer. Something to consider in the future with any future stories you write. |
| 2005-01-11 21:25:14 |
The Island, chapter 02
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i thought it was a decent story, but where did he get these clothes from since chapter one says he has none. |
| 2006-12-04 19:37:06 |
The Island, chapter 02
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and here i thought he was naked on the island |
| 2004-09-24 03:55:50 |
The Island, chapter 03
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that was fucking hot i loved it i wish i could be that boy id love some monkey sperm in my mouth i rate it a 10 |