| 2007-07-14 00:45:35 |
she wanted it hard so i gave it to her hard
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Good story, its very easy to tell you yourself are young. The story was written decently, the sex scenes a bit choppy but overall decent. If you work on your grammar a bit you can do great things. 7/10 |
| 2007-07-14 03:59:19 |
she wanted it hard so i gave it to her hard
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not bad but needs a little wrk. |
| 2007-07-14 08:31:46 |
she wanted it hard so i gave it to her hard
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shit head can't spell |
| 2007-07-15 01:27:26 |
she wanted it hard so i gave it to her hard
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good story, but the spelling needs work |
| 2007-07-16 02:39:41 |
she wanted it hard so i gave it to her hard
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Learn spelling & grammar and your stories will be readable as well as extremely erotic. Descriptions were quite good once they were decoded around the apelling. |