| 2007-08-16 18:41:34 |
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Hey I wanted to answer a few comments from below. The boy and his dad were going to pick up the car. I should of wrote it different but the dad was driving. Also I post my stories on other sites too, just so everyone don't think that I'm stealing a story that I didn't write. One more thing the ass sniffing thing I throw in my stories just to get the attention of the reader. In real life that would be gross, but in fiction i think it sounds hot. thanks for reading |
| 2007-08-16 22:15:01 |
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Whats up with all the E's? |
| 2007-08-17 00:31:40 |
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I loved it =))))) I came quite a bit =) please post more =) |
| 2007-08-17 09:05:58 |
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You seem to have a problem with your computer. The extra 'e' and other extraneous typos do detract from an otherwise fair story. Sorry. 4/10 |
| 2007-08-17 09:34:05 |
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great story...cept for the pissing in the mouth thing 6/10 |