| 2007-08-20 13:46:22 |
Midnight Swim
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"Lydia put on a blue T-shirt..." Who the hell is "Lydia" at the end? Good romantic story but clean up the grammar. |
| 2007-08-20 14:03:40 |
Midnight Swim
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Is it Kate or Lydia?????? |
| 2007-08-20 20:34:32 |
Midnight Swim
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I fucking suck, I got my characters confused. |
| 2007-08-20 23:27:24 |
Midnight Swim
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This was REALLY good. It reminded me of my boyfriend and I. It was almost weird how much it relates to us. I lovvved it. |
| 2007-08-20 23:45:21 |
Midnight Swim
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great, but i dont think you should switch to 1st person for #2 |