| 2007-09-08 07:20:30 |
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hahahhahahahahahaha iwas laughing all the way this is humourous. |
| 2007-09-08 13:52:24 |
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bad grammer but great story,i skipped some parts honestly lol |
| 2007-09-09 19:52:42 |
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You need to show a change between scenes, even if it's just an extra line break. It's just a little confusing when you shift from Jessie to Nancy with nothing in between. You also left Jessie and Amy hanging; you never described how they finished.
Other than that, great story.
=Dreamer= |
| 2007-09-09 21:45:32 |
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what happened to the blondies?
my bf just fucked me hard! 10/10 |
| 2007-09-11 01:28:04 |
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I just fucked your bf hard....bareback too!!!! |