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| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2007-10-14 21:33:13 | A TEENAGE ESCORT - Pt. 1 | Really good stuff. A few comments, first when you are going through and proofing it pay really close attention to the way you describe how there bodies play. I got lost a couple of times trying to figure out how they were laying, and in what positions. Do not be afraid to be blunt with your descriptions if you need to for clarity. Also, keep it plausible, I am not sure any petite 16 yo could take a fisting even with a week to practice, much less on the first night. I suspect that the 'client' would have had at least a first name. On the other hand, I can very much see a pro cruising the Goodwill to find fresh talent, though showing up at the HS in a Limo might be a tad un-subtle. TM, its a great start to what I expect will be a great series, keep it up. |
| 2007-10-15 00:26:27 | A TEENAGE ESCORT - Pt. 1 | Not bad. The grammar isn't perfect, but it's generally very easy to follow. Excellent story. |
| 2007-10-15 00:36:37 | A TEENAGE ESCORT - Pt. 1 | Very sexy, some things were a tad unclear at times, but other than that great job, and keep up the good work!!!!! |
| 2007-10-15 09:48:54 | A TEENAGE ESCORT - Pt. 1 | I'm not so full of myself I just can't stand haters, people who put others down. you think scolding me on my grammar is going to have any positive effect? if my grammar was better i would have written better, get a life, read the story for its' erotic content, it's not an english comp term paper, it's a read and get excited porn story. do you critisize the dialogue, or lack thereof, or plot in the porn you jack-off to? enjoy the story and if not read a different story, but acting superior in your comments only makes you an asshole that likely can't even get laid! |
| 2007-10-16 03:14:46 | A TEENAGE ESCORT - Pt. 1 | That commentor seriously sounded like a moronic screw-head. To that bitchy wuss over there, if u had so much to complain and critise u should have never read sex stories on porn sites. there is nothing wrong if writers make minude humanly errors, and u had to go to the extent of putting this story down just so to make ur point. i will have u know that this story being labelled as good is a understatement and if u think, well, u r better come out here, post ur story and let us judge u like u did with her. |