| 2007-11-06 03:57:16 |
Gotta Go Right Now
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ive read a lot better. its defentely never gonna get on the top rated but all and all not the worst. probably would of been better if like the daughter and mother planned it or somethin jus not like that. |
| 2007-11-06 04:09:23 |
Gotta Go Right Now
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just because you write a bunch of stories it doesnt mean they are any good, try taking a course in creative writting. dont stop writting, just please please please try to be more creative, you cant juts add water sports to a storys description if you arent going to use it sexually, please ask for advice all your stories tend to follow the same panth and after a few sentences they tend to be predictable. Im sure u can get better. |
| 2007-11-06 04:55:58 |
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very poor |
| 2007-11-06 05:38:30 |
Gotta Go Right Now
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For a short story, I think it's great. As for those who hate this kind of 'FICTION!', why are you reading it in the first place? FB, you definately have skill in all your stories, regardless of what anyone says. |
| 2007-11-06 06:15:15 |
Gotta Go Right Now
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Incest may be wrong in most people's minds, but it's definitely nopt "homosexual." What a dumb comment from one of the readers. Fbailey, I kind of liked this story, but I've seen others from you that I enjoyed more. 8/10 |