| 2007-11-17 02:37:47 |
Ben 10 and the New Alien chapter 1
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hmm heheheheh it was an excelent story even if it didnt realy keep along with the story of the series lol yo but the charecters did act like the ones in the series |
| 2007-11-18 03:54:23 |
Ben 10 and the New Alien chapter 1
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Good story, but I don't think Ben would have a 6" cock, and I don't believe Gwen would EVER touch her self. A few spelling errors. Other than that, your story is the greatest shit I have ever read. Definately 10/10! |
| 2007-11-18 04:12:45 |
Ben 10 and the New Alien chapter 1
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Good work, no major grammar errors to jar me out of the experience, wonderful lgoic to the alien powers (Ultrasonic vibrations move best thruogh water, Human body mostly water, Vibrations = Orgasm). First Class Work, take Off Pregnant Listing. |
| 2007-11-18 12:51:57 |
Ben 10 and the New Alien chapter 1
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good story..kept me cummin 5/5 |
| 2007-11-18 19:30:26 |
Ben 10 and the New Alien chapter 1
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Grats on an excellent Fanfic. Heh I guess we know who Ben 10K's son's mom is ;-) Lets see the next chapter |