| 2007-11-15 17:27:04 |
No one underfoot.
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omg i wana fuck that girl and i came in my pants goddamit! if u dont make a sequel i will die.... |
| 2007-11-15 17:54:50 |
No one underfoot.
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Very good story, there was plenty of bluid up and I could really feel the sexual tension between them, and the way you described the characters them selves and their enviroments was amazing. this deserves a sequal. 10/10 |
| 2007-11-15 18:17:03 |
No one underfoot.
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Very well done. Sequel and more! Delve into the almost getting caught by the girlfriend and doing things while on the phone with her. |
| 2007-11-15 20:55:20 |
No one underfoot.
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brilliant! deffo write a sequel.....brilliantly wirtten, deadly story lline! 10/10 |
| 2007-11-15 21:19:56 |
No one underfoot.
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Nice work 10/10 keep writing! |