| 2007-11-27 10:09:57 |
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Not bad by any means, but keep writing. Practice makes perfect they say. 7/10 |
| 2007-11-27 19:57:43 |
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very good story . pretty good detail . go in to description of the girl . age , height . weight . more detail of her body - pussy lips - nipples - bum hole - and use more fingers especially doing an anal massage while sucking her clit -----make her come and ask for anal sex! |
| 2007-11-29 01:43:14 |
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Good story... Dont change anything, just keep it going |
| 2007-11-29 10:38:11 |
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Highlystimulating..but agree with reader aboutmore description |
| 2007-11-29 13:51:17 |
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Where did leaving France come from? Martine was raped by a gang, but she wants to be all his. Great situation. He doesn't have to break her in. More. |